nineteenth breakdown

I read your earlier work with interest.  It seemed to have something of promise about it that is sadly lacking from your latest endeavours.  You held a clear narrative style that engaged the reader in a way that left them wanting more.  Unfortunately this piece gives more of less, taking from what you had and leaving little worth keeping.  I found myself immersed in predictable nonsense hardly worthy of your time and effort; the damage was such that the few moments of brilliance only highlighted the sorry state of the whole, leaving the reader at best unsatisfied.  I realise this is only the taster chapter and that it may seem unfair to judge so early, but at the moment it still feels wrong and I can only recommend some heavy editing.

Advertisements

About Roy Smith

Roy Smith lives in the Medway Towns, where he works with young people and spends a lot of time writing nonsense and enjoying himself. Most of his writing happens at night and other inconvenient moments, when he is regularly interrupted by his dog and the desire to play old video games.

2 responses to “nineteenth breakdown”

  1. sarah says :

    Wow did u make that up? I’m not submitting anything if they r that nasty! Simon Cowell eat ur heart out!

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: